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Inside my mind there is glass
Shattered
There was once a box of myself
My happiness
My aspirations
My all
What happened when you threw your stones?
I think the answer is crystal clear
It’s apparent
You broke me
You left me dieing
You killed me
I'm...... Shattered....
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CursedArchangels Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
I like the box metaphor. Everything that I am is kept in a safe that only a couple of people know the combination to. Insanity Pledge! (Check out my gallery if you wanna see what I mean)

This is a really good poem, which I came across while attempting to find a poem of my own with the same name (which I've just realised isn't up yet >< ). I like how it's short and to the point, it leaves the reader wondering what's happened to this box which has shattered it so, and wanting to help.

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UnCanard Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2005
:hug: ...just :hug: ...I don't know how else to respond.
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SentimentallyScared Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2005
Aww, It's fine.... :hug:
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UnCanard Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2005
:hug: I just feel like I should have had some other response...but my first and only instinct was the protective one...
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SentimentallyScared Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2005
:hug: Aww i know my dear, I know..
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Aurora--Rose Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2004  Hobbyist Writer
awesome!
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SentimentallyScared Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2004
Thankies :hug:
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ooooooo vewy nice
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SentimentallyScared Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2004
Thankies :hug:
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ur velcome ............arrrrrr!!!!!
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DeadlyWitch Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2004
"What happened when you threw your stones?"
Just.... don't threw....
Love you!!!
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SentimentallyScared Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2004
awwww love you too :hug:
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DeadlyWitch Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2004
Ehehehe!
:blushes:
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xybre Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2004  Hobbyist General Artist
Short and to the point, painful and full of sadness. Your weekend sucked even more than mine it seemed... I didn't write even one good angsty poem... You wrote like two... :hug:
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SentimentallyScared Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2004
Lol my weekend sucked a whole lot of monkey butts.... and no .. i didn't get a picture. :cling:
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xybre Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2004  Hobbyist General Artist
Lmfao. :rofl:
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SentimentallyScared Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2004
lol :poke:
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Sick-little-Wolfboy Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2004  Student General Artist
You keep all that in a glass box?
I locked mine up in a Large rusted Steel box....
Witch Is my Insanity....
And My "All" (witch sounds like a soul) I sold to become the next grim reaper....
Dragging sorry souls down to hell....
Yay, what fun....
.....
I think I popped to many :pills: .....
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SentimentallyScared Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2004
Yes i kept mine in a glass box... i was so fragile. so .. will you drag my soul down to hell ?
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Sick-little-Wolfboy Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2004  Student General Artist
Actually, I was thinking of making you a Wraith, (One of the Reapers Demonic helpers) SO you can help me.....
If you want to thou.....
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SentimentallyScared Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2004
YAY yeah ok ... can i have a long black cape with a hood ?
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Sick-little-Wolfboy Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2004  Student General Artist
Standard issuse....
along with many pointy weapons....
and a dental plan :D
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SentimentallyScared Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2004
Lol how about black nailvarnish
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Sick-little-Wolfboy Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2004  Student General Artist
Hmmmm, Let me Check on that....
*Telaports to hell*
..............
..............
..............
*Poof,Returns*
Yeah, Mr.S. said it was cool....
Would you like a Scythe too?
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SentimentallyScared Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2004
Lol yes please ... how is mr.S. today
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jademercenary Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2004
i like how you made your 'all' (which sounded kinda like your soul) into a pretty glass box. ....it's sad that they broke it. ...........(sigh)........mine's been broken lots of times......now, it's just being held together with good intentions, pretty dreams and alotta tape! :hug:
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SentimentallyScared Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2004
yes thats what i ment .. yes bloody fuck broke it and then ranover it all with her car.... awww i hope it all holds :hug:
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jademercenary Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2004
maybe you should stick it in a fire and see if it melts together again......
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SentimentallyScared Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2004
lol ... don't you think that'll hurt ?
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jademercenary Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2004
hmmm......it might....didn't think about that............(gasp) oh no! (runs downstairs)......Jack!!!! NOOOO!!!!!!! ...(a stunned Jack barely pauses before dropping a blue stained glass box, with an unusual amount of tape on it, into the burning fireplace)...........well, shit...
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SentimentallyScared Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2004
Lol oh dear ... i've been saving some hear *gives you all my tape* ... it was for my homework but oh well
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jademercenary Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2004
no,.......i don't think it matters now.....(holds molten blue mess in her hands)......
thanks anyway.....(glares daggers at Jack....he shrugs)
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SentimentallyScared Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2004
Awww *tapes it up for you*
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n0fear88 Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2004   Writer
u whacked out another masterpiece darlin' :) :clap:
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SentimentallyScared Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2004
Lol thank you so much :hug:
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saltyjon Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2004
thats pretty dam gud. i love it :hug: :smooch:
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SentimentallyScared Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2004
thank you :hug:
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saltyjon Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2004
ur welcum, :hug: :smooch:
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beckettwriting Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2004   Writer
Me likes. You've used good imagery there. :)
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SentimentallyScared Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2004
Thank you :hug: i'm glad you like it
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